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You Make Me Feel Whole

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The warmth of our bodies touching
Our breath escaping our mouths
The feeling of love runs through us
As we’re closer than ever before
We’re holding each other close
As we’re laying on the floor
A love this strong can’t be forgotten
Nor ignored nor rejected
A love this strong between us
Could have never been suspected
I’m staring into your eyes
That simply melt my broken soul
You make me realize all I have
Because you make me feel whole
me and my silly dreams that will never happen xD lol
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Unfuck-the-World's avatar
You have the uncanny ability to make people visualize not a scene, but a single moment and the emotions connected with it. These four lines:

I’m staring into your eyes
That simply melt my broken soul
You make me realize all I have
Because you make me feel whole


are my favourite- the  word choice, the rhyme, and the overall simplicity of the whole poem make this flow very well and it's possibly the sweetest, cutest thing I've read all day <3